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Dec 13, 2022
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HOPE ALIVE
Time has been tethered
in the cave of despair
life rides in the vehicle
of uncertainty and penury
but this time a sunrise
shall smile aloud sincerely
©© Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
About This Poem
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Comments
Rula
2 years 7 months ago
A lifting up piece JW
well structured. Short and to the point with effective visuals.
I can't see why you need to capitalize the word sincerely, but it's your poem and you know better
Jackweb
2 years 7 months ago
A big thanks
For stopping by. You're right! No intention of using upper case. Am changing it now.
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Lavender
2 years 7 months ago
Hope Alive
Hello, Jackweb,
Much said in six lines. "...a sunrise shall smile aloud sincerely." That definitely brings hope alive.
Thank you!
L
Jackweb
2 years 7 months ago
Wow!
A big thanks to you for reading and commenting.
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Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 7 months ago
Brief
But amazing. Keep them coming. I love the brevity.
Tim
Jackweb
2 years 7 months ago
Alright!
A big thanks to you for reading and commenting. Sure, I'll keep them coming... !
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Simon
2 years 7 months ago
Hopefully
This time a sunrise
Shall smile aloud sincerely.
This is a short but spicy piece, keep up the good work
Jackweb
2 years 7 months ago
O yeah!
Thanks so much for stopping by.
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