c lynn brooks

Jan 27, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This poem is part of the contest:

Hope in it's glory (jan contest)

The old year ended
so glad to see it leave
the new year extended
this was too much to believe

Looking ahead
my only relief
scattered and dead
like an old fall leaf

nothing there but a tunnel of light
how to get through
this was my plight
hope will surely ring loud and true

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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Comments

lovedly

5 years 5 months ago

short and sweet

you will need time
to get here your treat

happy Jan
your maiden contest
all the best

c lynn brooks

5 years 5 months ago

A couple of...

points. A typo, [too] much to believe. Do leaves shatter? I rather think that it should be [tattered].
~ Gee.
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c lynn brooks

5 years 5 months ago

gee

no not a typo if I used too that would indicate also. So using to is correct No leaves scatter lol thanks for pointing that out
Chrys

scribbler

5 years 5 months ago

Yeah

I think Too would be correct as it can also connote more than needed. But otherwise a succinct poem for the new year........stan

c lynn brooks

5 years 4 months ago

all

consulted with a retired English teacher and as such have changed it too
thanks agin for your input

scribbler

5 years 4 months ago

so............

did you change it also or too much? just being a smart ass or at least half of one lol

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

Its not it's

...in the title. Apostrophes are so simple to understand.

If you insist on omitting punctuation (what a total cliché that is, btw), then you should surely drop all capital letters too. Consistency.
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

Its not it's

O dear. People like you just won't accept corrections.
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

May I point you to your comment?

Earlier this year, you wrote (I quote verbatim) "when reviewing a poem please keep in mind the little list that ask for intensity sensitive subject raw truth and follow the request also thank someone when they critique your work as they took the time to read and suggest. You do not have to use their suggestions as written in stone but be good enough to acknowledge the time given to read and critique"

I haven't spotted your "thank you" note yet. Naturally, you are totally free to leave in bad grammar. That is your prerogative. But, according to your own writing, you should say thank you.
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