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Apr 12, 2012
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How
How can you start a fire
Without a little flame?
How can a storm begin
Without a drop of rain?
How can you grow a tree
Before you plant a seed?
How can there be life
If a heart doesn’t start to beat?
How can birds be soaring
If there’s no wings to fly?
How can it be day
When there’s no sun up in the sky?
Some things belong together.
No one can take them apart.
So how can I be happy
If I haven’t got your heart?
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
13 years 6 months ago
Hello Angelq,
"How" is a good title for this piece, IMHO. Your rhymes and imagery are sound. I liked this verse best:
How can birds be soaring
If there’s no wings to fly?
How can it be day
When there’s no sun up in the sky?
I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.
welcome to neopoet!
always, Cat
Nordic cloud
13 years 6 months ago
Angelq that's a name!
The only thing the: "there's no wings",
there are no wings-there's no wing, ?
If there are no wings that can fly.
This reminds me of a humorous verse,
no offence meant just enjoying...
"If all the world were paper
And all the sea were ink,
If all the trees were bread and cheese
What would we do for drink?
Anonymous, there are several verses, see on net.
Nice little verse Angelq
Nordic cloud.