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Mar 02, 2024
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How Long Will I Bleed?
I thought
it would be easy
to let you go
My walls stood proud
Shielding me the whole time
I thought
maybe
letting you go
wouldn't hurt
But here I am
writing about you
while my heart
aches
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
1 year 4 months ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem effectively captures the emotional struggle of trying to let go of someone despite the pain it causes. The use of short, simple lines conveys a sense of vulnerability and raw emotion. However, consider exploring more vivid imagery or metaphorical language to enhance the depth of the emotions expressed. Additionally, try to vary the structure of the poem to create a more dynamic flow and engage the reader further. Overall, this piece shows promise in its emotional honesty but could benefit from further development in terms of imagery and structure.
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Alaethia D
1 year 4 months ago
Beautifully written-
I know this feeling, and I'm sorry you have the experience to know it too. You've done so beautifully. Thank you for sharing. <3
Kristen H.
1 year 4 months ago
Thanks!
Thank you for your lovely comment! I appreciate your feedback! :)