Hurry Sundown

Daylight shows every line
every callous
every sc ar
and every tear

Hurry sundown
hide all traces
of past love and past regrets

Sunlight shows more
than people want to see
let me live in obscurity

Hurry sundown
hide all traces
of love gained
then lost
of a lifetime
of tears,fears and longing

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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Comments

chima ononogbu

4 years 5 months ago

So nice Lynn

Nice piece put together with exceptional poetic rhymes. Though I don't believe love can exist outside the convenience of money and romance, I still enjoy reading and writing moving love poems. Good one Lynn.

c lynn brooks

4 years 5 months ago

Chima

Thank you so much for your kind comment

VanRyan

4 years 5 months ago

Well put, Lynn;

Great lines; indeed, the light of day shows the truth that many seek to hides. Jerry/van

c lynn brooks

4 years 5 months ago

Jerry

Thank for your kind words

c lynn brooks

4 years 5 months ago

Teddy

Thank you so much my friend

Lavender

4 years 5 months ago

Hurry Sundown

Hello, Chrys,
Sometimes the night does give us the relief of seeing our heartaches and the truth - well said.
Thank you, and take care.
L

c lynn brooks

4 years 5 months ago

lavendar

Thank you

Geezer

4 years 5 months ago

This almost...

got away from me! Don't know how I missed it!
Only one little crit! I would make the line [" Past love and old regrets"] Other than that, this is a tale that most have experienced, but aren't able to write about like you have. ~ Geez.
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