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May 14, 2025
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I am building...
I am building
on what has come before me,
but I am constructing
in a different way.
I reached the next step,
the next stage,
and I can do so
with confidence.
My structures are strong
and well-developed.
I stand on firm ground,
and this makes me feel
protected and safe.
It was a zig-zag journey,
but it was worth it.
My thoughts are clear
and my mind has purpose,
focus and direction.
I will continue to build,
but only because I can.
What I build will be
made specially for me.
It will have everything
that I need,
everything that I want.
That is good enough for me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I see myself as the project manager of my life. I have all the elements I require right in front of me, and I recognise that I am going to use them in the best way possible to build something worthwhile and full of meaning.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
1 month 4 weeks ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "I am building..." effectively conveys a sense of personal growth and empowerment through the metaphor of construction. The imagery of building on what has come before while constructing in a different way is powerful and reflective of individuality and progress. The repetition of phrases like "I am building" and "My structures are strong" adds to the poem's strength and conviction.
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure or form of the poem to enhance its impact. Experimenting with line breaks, stanza lengths, or rhythm could help create a more dynamic flow and engage the reader even further. Additionally, exploring more vivid or specific imagery could enrich the reader's experience and make the themes of growth and self-empowerment more tangible.
Overall, the poem effectively captures a sense of personal agency and determination, but further exploration of form and imagery could elevate its impact and resonance.
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Lavender
1 month 3 weeks ago
I Am Building
Hello, Gogetter,
This poem lives up to your poetry name - very energetic and positive.
Happy building!
L