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turbo1904
turbo1904
May 26, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

I Like I Don't Like

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I LIKE AND I DON'T LIKE

I like a person with a nice smile.
I hate people who are hostile.

I like it when people tell the truth.
I hate it when people are uncouth.

I like people who look out for the underdog.
I hate people with rehearsed dialogue.

I like all the beautiful ladies.
I hate the God Hades.

I like the word from the wise,
I hate dirty little lies.

I like all walks of life.
I hate my ex-wife.

I like all animals.
I hate all scandals.

I like family and friends.
I hate people who pretend.

I like life a little sweeter.
I hate liars and, a cheater.

I like vanilla ice cream.
I hate nightmares in my dream.

I like to dance.
I hate to pay in advance.

Turbo1904 ♥

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: CA, USA

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 1 month ago

hello again Turbo!

you have a perfectly reasonable list of likes and dislikes, LOL! the problem is... it reads more like a shopping list than a poem. too many "I's" in it. that is my only suggestion. keep working on it and you will get there.

*hugs, Cat
p.s.

try: (don't much like people who are hostile) as an example.

Edward nigma

Edward nigma

3 years 1 month ago

It has to be connected

It doesn’t do anything or build up to anything.
Sure you like these things and hate other things but how do they make a point that is clear and sharp.
In order for it to leave an effect the first thing to have is a point to pierce your reader .