I Can Hardly Wait

I Can Hardly Wait
Written by Kelly Ann Wilson

My friend said life moves in circles
Like the seasons
To comfort me when I was grieving,
And I still hear her words in my mind.

Oh, how I soaked up all the sunlight.
How I felt it giving me life,
As I buried my feet in the sand
Beside the sea.

But the darkness is coming sooner.
The leaves are losing their emerald colour.
I just know
They’re about to set afire.

And though it’s true that after
Comes the long, cold Northern winter
Won’t fall be such magic?
I can hardly wait for it.

Written September 16, 2024
© 2024 Kelly Ann Wilson

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Read my writer’s blog at https://kwilsonarts.wordpress.com/

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ontario, Canada, CAN

Comments

Geezer

9 months 1 week ago

While your description of the

While your description of the cycles of life were spot on, and made me think of beaches, the sea, and the coming fall seasons, I felt there was something missing. Tell us what she said; you did in a general way, but you should have used specific wording, "Life moves in circles, everything comes around in it's time." or something to that effect. I think you had two ideas mixed together.
Making those words give meaning, and relating to how it affected your life.
"Everybody needs a little sun to grow." Give this some direction and it will be great. ~ Geez

Tawny023

9 months 1 week ago

I enjoyed how you crafted

I enjoyed how you crafted this poem and the bringing foreshadowing the fall as the leaves have already symbolically caught fire and I am excited about the fall but I am not sure why? And I am not sure if that’s a bad or good thing? I unfortunately see the glass half empty so I read it as sarcastic magic but of course I should read it more cheery eyed as fall is truly so beautiful with color. I am ok with not knowing what to think about a poem it’s almost like a multiple endings book.