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Jan 24, 2025
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I Don't Have To
I don’t have to say I love you,
As frequently as I do.
But a soothing warmth flows through me,
When I say those words to you.
I don’t have to take you in my arms,
When I see you walking about.
But to feel your body pressed to mine,
Is a blessing I can’t do without.
I don’t have to kiss you on the mouth,
Each time you come into view.
But the sweetness waiting on your lips,
Is a magnet that draws me to you.
I don’t have to look into your eyes,
Whenever you come through the door.
But the love and trust I see in them,
Makes me cherish you all the more.
I don’t have to do these simple things,
That’s a fact unalterably true.
But each of them fully confirms,
My boundless love for you.
About This Poem
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neopoet
5 months ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "I Don't Have To" beautifully captures the sentiment of expressing love through simple actions and gestures. The repetition of "I don't have to" in each stanza creates a rhythmic pattern that reinforces the message of love being shown through choice rather than obligation. The imagery of warmth, blessings, sweetness, and trust adds depth to the emotions conveyed in the poem.
One suggestion for further enhancing the poem could be to explore more varied imagery or metaphors to depict the depth of love and connection between the speaker and the subject. This could create a richer tapestry of emotions and experiences for the reader to engage with.
Additionally, considering varying the structure or form of the poem could add an element of surprise or intrigue for the reader. Experimenting with line breaks, stanza lengths, or rhyme schemes could further elevate the impact of the poem.
Overall, "I Don't Have To" effectively conveys a message of love and appreciation through its simplicity and sincerity. Expanding on the imagery and exploring
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Lavender
5 months ago
I Don't Have To
Hello, J.E.,
I see in your profile that you write poetry for your wife quite a lot. This appears to be another beauty! The language and thoughts are very affirming, strong and sincere.
Thank you!
L
(I believe you may have entered into the wrong contest...)