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May 02, 2025
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I don't know who I am
Without you
I've felt hollow
A deep sense of falling
But Just. Like.I.didn't. ask. to. be. born,
I can't ask you to be my crutch.
I'll never love myself.
But,I can't keep loving you either.
You're a false substitute,
For a broken individual.
We both deserve better.
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
1 month 3 weeks ago
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Geezer
1 month 3 weeks ago
I'm not sure...
that I get this one. Are you saying that because you don't feel good about yourself, that you don't feel worthy to love someone else? Sometimes, that is what brings out the best in us; our love for someone else. I know that I wouldn't be who I am today, if it weren't for my wife. Give yourself a break, him too. I would get rid of the periods in the fourth line. They just serve as a distraction. ~ Geez.
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kowque
1 month 3 weeks ago
I despise when i write out a reply
And it gets wiped out....
What I wanted to say was,the poem is confusing and needs work
Thank you for stopping by :)
kowque
1 month 3 weeks ago
Im on husband no 2
I never grew up with a father and sometimes I feel like Im doing everything wrong. I'm glad you have a wife and and an anchor. Gives me hope.
Geezer
1 month 3 weeks ago
My present wife...
is my third wife. But... we have been together for forty-five years. I finally got it right! My father was a mix of horror and alcohol, so maybe you were better off. Anyway, my point is that you must be patient and communicate. You will make it; you have a good heart. ~ Geez.
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