I Have Survived

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "I Have Survived" presents a strong narrative voice and a clear theme of survival and resilience in the face of war. The repetition of "No more" effectively emphasizes the speaker's longing for an end to violence and suffering.

However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery. While the existing imagery is evocative, it is also somewhat generic. For example, "missiles' bang," "humming drones," and "bombs and bullets" are all common tropes associated with war. By incorporating more unique and specific images, the poem could create a more vivid and impactful depiction of the speaker's experiences.

The poem's structure could also be refined. The current structure is somewhat irregular, with varying line lengths and stanza lengths. While this can create a sense of chaos and unpredictability that mirrors the theme of war, it can also make the poem feel disjointed. A more consistent structure could help to create a stronger sense of rhythm and flow.

Finally, the poem's ending could be more powerful. The final lines, "Please then, tell the world / I have survived / Once again," suggest a triumphant conclusion to the speaker's struggle. However, the phrase "Once again" implies that the speaker has survived multiple instances of war, which somewhat undermines the sense of finality and triumph. By reworking these lines, the poem could end on a more definitive and impactful note.

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I doubt that Palestinians will be counting their chickens. Israel is notorious for breaking ceasefires. I read the other day it's estimated to take 80 years to rebuild Gaza. The things we do to one another. Anyway, do you need the apostrophe in the opening line?

Amen, a hellish war for the ordinary people. Got to agree with Ray about Israel is governed by a bunch of warmongers. Great to read a poem from you, nicely done. Love Roscoe.

Hello, Rula,
Passionate throughout, but the last three lines are penetrating. Prayers for healing and peace in the days ahead.
Thank you,
Lx

No more missiles' bang - depends whether bang is a noun or a verb, I suppose. Your choice, of course.

I pray for the children of this earth the children of God and bless you for your brave words I pray you survive in love forever

this is my third visit to read your poem: "I Have Survived". It must be grueling to live on the front lines of such senseless hate and violence! I rips up my heart to think of you there! I pray you are surrounded by loves warmth... hello to your husband, too.

your, Candle