I Like I Don't Like

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I Like, I don't Like...(contest) by:eddy styx

I Like, I Don't Like...
by: eddy styx

I like dark moon, cloudy skies,
no stars to light my way.
the darker the better
at the dying of the day.

I don't like sunshine
splashing over the land,
where people lie on the beach
on towels on the sand.

I like shadows
where I can be hidden,
watching the careless
the foolish come unbidden.

I don't like loves first blush,
seeping under the skin
as a game of chance,
you just can't win.

I like darkened paths
as much as gloomy trails.
with my blade, I like to silence
her screams and wails.

I don't like cautious women
they put me off my game,
it's hard to strike
(if they know my proper name.)

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

I like this much...

The language use is good, [not a bunch of tongue twisters] and plain words to explain.
The rhythm is fast, and the theme is of a ruthless predator and well done. The beginning and ends are totally
what you would expect from eddy and his game. Great stuff!
~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

3 years 2 months ago

thanks Geez,

wow...I take that critique as getting straight A's in school! I appreciate your work here. when are we going to read a poem from "the boys"? looking forward to it!

ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat