I Recall All

I like it, so contemplating...

I would do something about the beginning, tho. Somehow, perhaps a more ethereal input?

Your form is what I’m commenting on. You could have uniform two line stanza, then a three line, then a five line, and then continue the 2-3-5 stanza lines that are already there.

If you separate the second stanza, to have only theee lines, and put the remaining two lines onto the next stanza, then that would make The difference.

rather asked those gone
to eternal homes
to finally rest

what they now think of my poems
the ones they never read.
All spoke in unison
from different corners of the wilderness
in harmonical chorus

And a question... “harmonical”??? Is that a word?