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I Watched You Fall

I watched you fall
so gracefully,
like yellow sighs
among the trees,
red silent notes
in harmony,
orange vestiges
of summer's memory -
and as you fell
near to the ground,
your final rest,
your journey bound,
I gazed up to
your empty trees
to witness them bow,
most reverently.
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About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 9 months ago

Not a thing...

that I would change! Simple clean, and most readable. I needed this! Thank you for the breath of clear, cool air, like Autum is supposed to be. ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 9 months ago

I just got back from a walk

The trail is green yellow and orange. The oaks haven’t yet turned burgundy. The black birch are always the first, then the sassafras

They’re just slowly drifting down
Just like the poem says,

Amazing job,
Tim

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 9 months ago

Hello, Tim,

It sounds like you had a wonderful walk! Trees are our oldest, dearest friends.
Thank you!
L