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I Will Meet You There.
I Will Meet You There.
Poem
On the days I miss you most,
I Will close my eyes and sleep.
I Will meet you in my dreams
in a moment we can keep.
I Will meet you with a hug
and with things I want to say.
I Will meet you under the sun
or a different place each day.
I Will meet you by the river
or back at our old home.
And at the times I cannot find you
In my dreams I shall still roam.
I Will meet you in the coffee shop
or at your favourite place.
I do not care just where it is
as long as I see your face.
I Will meet you at a park
so you can watch the animals play.
You can take their passion
back to heaven every day.
I Will meet you on each birthday
we no longer get to share.
I do not care just where it is
but I Will meet you there.
I Will meet you in the sunshine
or in the pouring rain.
I will walk through any storm
just to see you again.
I will meet you in my thoughts
A million times a day,
Along with every memory
I am lucky to replay.
Created Composed & Designed By:
Author Writer Novelist & Poet
*Mr. Marius F Robbertze*
AKA *" M "*
™ ©️ ®️
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Enjoy
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
neopoet
4 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "I Will Meet You There" demonstrates a thoughtful exploration of longing and remembrance. The repetition of "I Will meet you" throughout the poem effectively underscores the speaker's determination and longing. However, the poem could benefit from more varied language and imagery to avoid redundancy and to further engage the reader.
The poem's structure, with its consistent rhyme scheme and rhythm, provides a sense of stability and predictability that contrasts nicely with the theme of longing for someone who is no longer present. However, the rhythm is occasionally disrupted by lines of differing lengths, which can distract the reader. Adjusting these lines to maintain a consistent rhythm could improve the poem's flow.
The poem's imagery is clear and relatable, but it could be enhanced with more unique and specific details. For example, instead of "I Will meet you under the sun," the poet could describe a specific time of day or a particular setting that holds significance for the speaker and the person they miss.
The ending of the poem, where the speaker declares they will meet the person in their thoughts and memories, effectively brings the poem full circle and provides a poignant conclusion. However, the final line "I am lucky to replay" seems to introduce a new idea that isn't fully explored. The poem could benefit from further development of this idea or a more focused conclusion.
Lastly, the author's note at the end of the poem is somewhat distracting and could be removed to allow the poem to stand on its own. The poem's power and emotion should be able to speak for themselves without the need for additional context or explanation.
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Lavender
4 months 3 weeks ago
I Will Meet You There
Hello, and welcome to Neopoet!
Soft, tender, elegant, and so beautiful.
Thank you,
Lavender