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Feb 13, 2023
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If I go away from here
Who will ever ask ye
o where is lovedly
gone with the wind
or entered a dark forest
kidnapped by Aussies
taken to the ocean
If needed as and when
for an OCEANIC Cremation
But don't shed he told me
what
tears naturally
the ocean has plenty
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Jackweb
2 years 4 months ago
Reflections !
This reflects the poet’s unique thoughts and feelings. I know all must die but thinking about this now is raising clouds and emotions.
'Dark forest' and 'oceanic cremation' are very dangerous imagery, times of uncertainty and danger!
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lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
we all are
elements electronic of time
protons electrons and neutrons
all in varying kind in each
sole...SOLE
WE ALL ARE but entity's floating about the universe
thus my challenging e-verse in which I always uniquely converse
darkened IMAGERIES
for good for worse
forests are always dark
oceans fathomless
none are friendly in this universe
sad but it could be worse
Obadiah Grey
2 years 4 months ago
I like this, its original,
I like this, its original, its obviously a Lovedly!
Obi,
lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
Thanks
Obi
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Hmmm
Your idea for this where did it come from pray tell.
"But don't shed" he told me
"what?" I said
"tears naturally
the ocean has plenty"
I'd edit that last stanza as a conversation, punctuation is much needed when the poem/poet speaks in word.
Love and hugs Sis xox