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If I go away from here

Who will ever ask ye
o where is lovedly
gone with the wind
or entered a dark forest
kidnapped by Aussies
taken to the ocean
If needed as and when
for an OCEANIC Cremation

But don't shed he told me
what
tears naturally
the ocean has plenty

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Comments

Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 4 months ago

Reflections !

This reflects the poet’s unique thoughts and feelings. I know all must die but thinking about this now is raising clouds and emotions.

'Dark forest' and 'oceanic cremation' are very dangerous imagery, times of uncertainty and danger!
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lovedly

lovedly

2 years 4 months ago

we all are

elements electronic of time
protons electrons and neutrons
all in varying kind in each

sole...SOLE

WE ALL ARE but entity's floating about the universe
thus my challenging e-verse in which I always uniquely converse
darkened IMAGERIES
for good for worse

forests are always dark
oceans fathomless
none are friendly in this universe
sad but it could be worse

Seren

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Hmmm

Your idea for this where did it come from pray tell.

"But don't shed" he told me
"what?" I said
"tears naturally
the ocean has plenty"

I'd edit that last stanza as a conversation, punctuation is much needed when the poem/poet speaks in word.

Love and hugs Sis xox