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If It Ain't Broke
We’ll begin at the top -
send someone to the loft
to shed light on what’s dark and spooky,
seek out the machines
that have captured our dreams
and other instruments of cruelty.
Let’s excise and expose
what lies under clothes
and strip the whole joint naked,
so that nothing’s intact,
let’s be ruthless, in fact,
and if it ain’t broke then break it.
Go dismantle the beds
where the uneasy heads
will no longer lie a-mending
and then eradicate
everything that lies straight
until the infrastructure is bending.
Bring out the wrecking ball,
it’s unprofessional
and against all we ought hold sacred,
but just take a knife
to this dying life
and if it ain’t broke then break it.
Come, shatter the screens
that spy on the scenes
where we spent our time in quarters;
and when the cops discover
that we’ve killed Big Brother
then the camera won’t have caught us.
We’ll ransack the clinic
of all that is in it:
if it says Do Not Shake, we’ll shake it.
Let’s call time on the calm,
raise a general alarm
and if it ain’t broke then break it.
Exchange the sedatives
for any drug that gives
and the potions which disinhibit.
Spend the spare cash
on a superstore dash
through the zone marked wine and spirits.
When there’s no money left
we’ll pursue petty theft,
whatever we want we’ll take it.
If the weather is nice
we’ll have drinks with ice
and if the ice ain’t broke then we’ll break it.
Excavate the files
where the treason trials
were dramatised and documented.
Overwhelm the shredder
with each word and letter
that was wrung from the tormented.
Start the final fire,
build a funeral pyre
just as tall as we can make it.
To the flames consign
each Thou Shalt Not sign
and if it ain’t broke then break it.
Let us run amok
before they stop the clock;
there’s no points for good behaviour.
Let me be the man
who will fling the flan
in the face of last year’s saviour.
As the days approach
that we fear most,
when we’re cast into the snake-pit,
pause a while and reflect,
pay your last respects
and if it ain’t broke then break it.
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5 months ago
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Ruby Lord
5 months ago
Hi Ray, your poem revels in
Hi Ray, your poem revels in destruction through rebellion but it feels a little overwhelming in places. As usual your playful rhymes are perfect and I am envious of your craftsmanship.
Maybe building towards a rebellion so everything comes crashing down in the final stanza? Ruby xx
Lavender
5 months ago
If It Ain't Broke
Hello, Ray,
Kind of a Dr. Seuss meets dystopia feel here. Your language and structure are always remarkable.
Thank you,
L
Ray Miller
5 months ago
If It Ain't Broke
I used to be a Mental Health Nurse and this was supposed to be a kind of lament for the last place I worked in - an environment which was wonderful for both patients and staff. So of course it got closed down. I think the anger has tended to overwhelm the regret.
Dr Seuss, yeah? Well, I've been compared to much worse, I suppose.
Lavender
5 months ago
Hello, Ray,
Thanks for the extended explanation - I see all of that, now. Well done. The Dr. Seuss comparison is purely referring to the use of satire, which he used abundantly.
Thank you!
L