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Mar 28, 2013
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If Only
TV opens up the world.
Each distant peak sits so,
behind generic signs for gasoline.
Vague promise feeds the heart;
each scene,
each restaurant view.
The elegance of legs crossed
leisurely. Tanned arms on elbows
leaning in
to coffee cups
like clouds held waiting,
like a sign that says
ten miles to go.
How anxious,
how complete the yearning robbery.
The glamour lads who calculate their visit.
Sunglasses hold back tresses spilled
like lemon grass, like grape vines
overflowing.
Self contained,
yet still an absence.
If only there's an answer,
if only eyes would turn.
The call to call again
when afternoon has let
the shadows fall
and pave the way.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
12 years 7 months ago
Excellent Work Ross
and well crafted indeed . Nothing to critique
Lovely closing lines
The call to call again
when afternoon has let
the shadows fall
and pave the way for blessing
It sums it up all.
Ross Hamilton Hill
12 years 7 months ago
Hi Rula
we meet again, thanks for your comment.
loved
12 years 7 months ago
simply marvelous poetry from you
how we all wish we could emulate
such beauty you so lavishly display
thank the tv
we may
Ross Hamilton Hill
12 years 7 months ago
thank ou
I'm still working on this and have changed a few minor details, so glad you liked it.
Ross Hamilton Hill
12 years 7 months ago
Oops that should be
thank you Loved.
loved
12 years 7 months ago
thank you
for sharing your poem
Seren
12 years 7 months ago
Sublime poetry Ross I saved
Sublime poetry Ross I saved this one before bed
One of the best poems I've read recently
Love the last stanza
Love Jc xxx
Frenchf
12 years 7 months ago
I like the way
The modern world has been described in this write starting from the TV and the coffee cups
Frenchf
12 years 7 months ago
I like the way
The modern world has been described in this write starting from the TV and the coffee cups