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mona
mona
Dec 22, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

If you knew

If you owned my heart,
Would you give me happiness?
If you loved me, let me know the truth
But
If you just like me, then keep me away
I may fall in love with you

Would you know me, kiss me?
Salute me and carry me to your horizon
Desire me and make me your feminine half
Let me be your queen, your majesty and consort
Imprison, and then release me
Torture me and cure me

Take me to where my world will meet yours
But please
Don’t free me too far from you

All I wanted from you is too simple
I want to get lost
Between the lines of your hands
The only question in my mind is...
Can we do that without any fear or being sinners?
Otherwise let it be our great sin is falling in love
In this world love...
Did not, doesn’t, and will not be a sin at any century.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: LBY

Favorite Poets: Some Arab poets, my love once, .....Dear friends too

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Comments

mand

mand

14 years 6 months ago

Hello Mona

Excellent flow, full of emotion and feeling

Thank you for sharing

Love Mand xxxxxxxx

mona

mona

14 years 6 months ago

Dear Mand

Thank you to you too for thos comment.

D

Dalton

14 years 6 months ago

A strong piece

A strong piece, sweet, tender and yet honest. You have the gift. JohnXxx

Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 6 months ago

Mona

You beautifly capture the desperation of love, that almost feels like love in that measure should be a sin, but it's not. it's just the insanity of it, blinding to see nothing else.
I love this write!!
Always Eddie

loved

loved

14 years 6 months ago

Love attracts

Arabian Nights
Love alone attracts like
Bees to honey
Lovely Arabian nights
Forgotten
In the nectar of desperation
You know

Alas love did flow
From top to toe

A fool only shall leave ye
In the wilderness of time
Where can one find
A sweet lover
Of thy singular kind

mona

mona

14 years 6 months ago

It is early morning hear"6:am" just dropped in to see the.....

It is early morning hear"6:am" just dropped in to see the comments and I saw yours.

Dear Loved and my friend too.
Where have you been all this time?.

You know
your poem drew a big smile on my face. Thanks
It is a great start for new day.

Thank you for your lovely comment

loved

loved

14 years 6 months ago

u steal words from my mouth

Spoken Words

You steal words
From my mouth
I was to ask of you
As you haven't read
Nor commented
Any of mine
Whither in the vast ocean of time
Did you stray?
Into the darker
Canyons and crevices
I felt utterly betrayed.

Now that you have come
Do stay
I can't let you again
Go away this way
Albeit tis late
Sunset of my life
But a friend
I can still be
If there is no strife

mona

mona

14 years 6 months ago

Did I!

sorry,
maybe I did that before you say any Lol.
I will be there and leave very honest comments, but don't be sad if I was too much honest.

thanks again

loved

loved

14 years 6 months ago

my beautiful comments were wiped away

by the stance
of mysterious hands
so i pray
i shall stay
and hear your version
some other day
Arabian nights
don't forget
that will be
my last regret

K

Kailashana2

14 years 6 months ago

I love this poem....you have

I love this poem....you have touched the sublime. You begin the poem with an extraordinary and simple question, and end it with a simple and extraordinary answer.

~A

R

raj

14 years 6 months ago

Dear Mona

a very reflective write ..very expressive and effective....

warmly..

R

raj

14 years 6 months ago

Dear Mona

Yes Mona..the deep seated emotions in your heart are palpable in the write...

Merry Christmas to you and your beloveds...

S

scribbler

14 years 6 months ago

if

I agree that to love can never be a sin, but at times to act on love can be wrong ( as in love for another's mate ) very powerful write and only suggestion I'd make is in lines 16 and 17. I think both should be either want or wanted....................scribbler

S

scribbler

14 years 6 months ago

if

I agree that to love can never be a sin, but at times to act on love can be wrong ( as in love for another's mate ) very powerful write and only suggestion I'd make is in lines 16 and 17. I think both should be either want or wanted....................scribbler

S

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

me again

I was so wrapped up in the yearning displayed in this poem I forgot to make 2 suggestions lol :
line-3 change loved to love to maintain tense
line-16 change wanted to want for same reason
of course if the mixing of tenses is intentional, ignore these.........................scribbler

mona

mona

14 years 5 months ago

welcome back:))))))))

Thank you very much Stan.

I will see what I can do, and your suggestions always welcomed on my page.
I'm still trainee in poetry.:)))))

luvXxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

hobo

hobo

14 years 5 months ago

so beautiful

This is so beautiful my friend, it makes me believe in love