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I'm angry

That you moved on.

I thought we were forever.

Then, I thought we were a few years.

But, no matter how much I tried to squeeze my hope into some type of "something"

It didn't work.

I lost you.

And now I have to see you be happy,without me.

I guess I was the problem.

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Country/Region: ZAF

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neopoet

neopoet

1 year ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively conveys feelings of loss, disappointment, and self-reflection. The repetition of "I thought" emphasizes the speaker's evolving understanding of the relationship. The use of short, fragmented lines creates a sense of emotional turmoil and the abrupt ending with "I guess I was the problem" leaves a strong impact. Consider exploring more vivid imagery or specific details to enhance the emotional depth of the poem and engage the reader further. Additionally, reflecting on how the speaker's anger manifests or evolves throughout the piece could add complexity to the theme.

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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

1 year ago

Hi Koki

I know this feeling all too well. You may not have been the problem, it may have been them and how quick they were to replace you. It is so difficult when one is ready to let go and the other isn't. Anger is normal when promises were made. Be kind to yourself. Happiness awaits.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

1 year ago

Dear Koki,

One thing I can tell you is that this person was not worth the pain they caused you...let them turn to dust and be glad you are free because you are worth it!

*hugs, Cat

kowque

kowque

1 year ago

Well...

The site did that thing where it crashes AFTER I say something lol

Sorry 'bout that

kowque

kowque

1 year ago

I wanted to say that

As much as I may want the person to be dust lol they fathered my baby and she loooves her dad so yeah....such is reality

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

1 year ago

Dear Koki,

I wish for you all the best that life has to offer and may it come soon.

*hugs and stardust, Cat