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Mar 18, 2022
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I'm Saving Daylight... Neo. Random Challenge #13
The last time I was lost in time
My Mother told me, I should change my clocks
So, I had to crawl up on a chair
To be saving Daylight, which doesn't really need saving
Balancing on shaky legs, on shaky legs
I reached up for the clock
Feeling the ticking of the second-hand
Imagining that I had to crawl along a cliff, just to make it more exciting
My Mother asked me why I was humming
I said the last time I was lost in time
I had to crawl across the face of a cliff
Mother doesn't understand that you have to have the danger music
Saving Daylight is a tricky business
You have to crawl backward
Feeling the ticking of time
Mother thinks I'm childish and a little out of touch
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just a little exercise to try and get all four of the challenges in one poem.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 3 months ago
Thanks...
for stopping by and leaving your comments. Yes, saving time does seem to be the thing these days! Touching everything in reach as always, ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
dear geezer,
pardon my saying so...but your mother doesn't seem to have much of an imagination, lol. I hope that she could appreciate the very special little boy she had. I vote we git rid of the dinosaur that daylight savings IS! once again, you have made me laugh!
*hugs, Cat
Geezer
3 years 3 months ago
Actually...
my mom, does have a good imagination and a good sense of humor. She still likes a good joke and when she isn't in too much pain, can crack a wisecrack with the best of them. She is 94 now, and living in a nursing home. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
3 years 3 months ago
hello Geez,
I hope she finds some relief from the pain. I use self-hypnosis and meditation Tylenol and an occasional oxycodone (about once every one to three weeks at bedtime) it is nice she has humor and you, her very great treasure!
*hugs, Cat
One
3 years 3 months ago
Gee
This well-penned piece grabbed me with one simple line:
"You have to crawl backward"
That one one line gave this whole poem meaning to me & has already created a draft in my head of a new piece to write.
A typical Geezer poem which is a style I've always enjoyed about your writing & your view on life.
regards
One