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Feb 18, 2013
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Impressionable
Impressionable young women
encouraged to enter a trade
that oft belittles and degrades
detrimental to mental health
not worth the short-term wealth
people have become inured
forget the pain often endured
reality becomes obscured
to enter a life of vice
women can feel they have no choice
no other way they recognise
fed by their dealers lies
I always picture it seedy
making a living from the needy
pimps are just plain greedy
big men, in fact, weedy
I’m told its consensual
to me thats nonsensical
is it anyway factual
maybe ‘John’s’ whimsical
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 5 months ago
Sue
I would love to see this expanded a little and put into stanzas, there is a story here to be told and it is ready, Yours Ian.T
sueb
12 years 5 months ago
Thanks Ian T x
Thanks Ian T x