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INCREMENTS
Sometimes I think of good old days
but were they really all that good?
Or are they brightened by time's glaze
as I squint beneath memories' hood?
But that past can not be cured
nor brought back to anyone
just recollections old and blurred.
Like leaves they all turn slowly dun.
Let me share a secret my friend
the future has an ending point
and we all come to that end
like the snap of a breaking joint.
So let the past go where it will,
let future's worries dissipate.
Though we cannot make time stand still
its Nows which add up to our fate.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I know this is pretty raw so feel free to help
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
4 years 1 month ago
Help is on the way...
Know, that we cannot make time stand still
It's the 'Now' that adds up our fate.
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scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
I need
all the help I can get lol
Ray Whitaker
4 years 1 month ago
This lives in that philosophical place
that is never far away. That place that authenticity comes from, and spawns creativity. Really like this.
scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
Hi Ray
I never know on my own whether or not something I write is any good. Thank you for your kind comment
Triskelion
4 years ago
For a start;
Hi scribbler. consider changing "good" to a synonym.(great, grand) and try to replace "hood" it's a real reach for me...
Thomas
scribbler
4 years ago
Hi
I have not been happy with those 2 lines since they were written. Good to know my instincts are correct lol. I'm going to do an edit before long and will see if I can straighten this out