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Jun 05, 2025
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Inspired
By the stillness
within me
to be able to be calm,
peaceful and rested.
The peace that stillness brings
opens my mind
and makes me think,
resolve,
and solve.
Pure inspiration
from that wonderful silence
which is within me.
Bringing out
the creativity
of my mind
through my words.
Getting through each day
on a higher plain,
an elevated level.
Something that I only learned
to develop
and to appreciate.
It brings out
the music in me.
It evolves
in many different forms.
The power and the strength
of that stillness
is awesome.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I was wandering around my daughter's house, in the silence. I began to see this poem emerging about what a great discovery which stillness has been for me. The words, as usual, spilled across the page, from my thoughts at that particular moment.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem explores the theme of inner stillness as a source of calm, inspiration, and creativity. The subject matter is clear and consistent throughout, focusing on the transformative power of quiet reflection.
One strength is the straightforward, meditative tone that suits the content well. The poem’s structure—short lines and simple language—mirrors the simplicity and clarity that stillness brings. The repetition of the word “stillness” reinforces its central importance.
To deepen the impact, consider varying the imagery and incorporating more concrete, sensory details. For example, instead of abstract phrases like “the music in me” or “an elevated level,” specific metaphors or images could evoke the experience more vividly. This would help readers connect emotionally and visualize the internal state.
The poem’s rhythm is somewhat irregular, which can be effective in a free verse style, but attention to cadence might enhance the flow and musicality, especially given the theme of “music.” Experimenting with line breaks, enjambment, or subtle rhyme could add a lyrical quality.
Finally, the ending line “The power and the strength / of that stillness / is awesome” feels a bit flat compared to the rest of the poem. A more evocative or surprising conclusion might leave a stronger impression. Perhaps consider showing the effect of stillness on the speaker’s life or creativity in a more concrete way.
Overall, the poem communicates a meaningful message but could benefit from more vivid imagery and refined musicality to fully engage the reader’s senses and emotions.
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