Invictus re write(for masters ws) original poem by Wm Ernest Henley

this is a powerful poem about the triumphant soul.

Alid

Having both seen the original poem and heard it recited, I can honestly say that your re-write is exceptionally well done! You have maintained the premise and optimism of the work, and your language use is spot on! All in all, a marvelous job of which you have a right to be proud!

I am not part of this workshop but will just pop in to say that your write is exceptionally good.
I had a flag up on the 2nd and third lines in your last stanza not sure why but it came up as:-
nor will the amount of challenge in the role
I alone control my fate.
Not sure of the context but I thought I would say.
Take care , Yours as always, Ian

(though I believe you forgot to check the box that puts it in the workshop stream)

A difficult poem to rewrite imo
I have to say, though, that although yours does do it justice, I do prefer Henley's version :)
love judy
xxx