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IRAQNOPHOBIA by Ziggy and Lou

I pay homage to the soldiers
who took charge ,when words failed
those who ordered the
execution of our youth.

I pay homage to soldiers
who are now departed,
A clear blue sky divides
the living from the dead.

Breathtaking sunsets creep
unfolding on to troubled horizons,
gaining ground.
Whilst those that are left cry,
" hear me lord, bring them home to me”.

United they stand in bloodshed
targets acquired to shield politicians.
Shoot to kill.
What's fair about warfare?
No one wins.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Comments

ziggy

14 years 8 months ago

hi

hi there I see its posted lol
it was as always a good exercise writting with you and I feel we will co-write again you kick it of next time ok chat soon my friend ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

lou

14 years 8 months ago

Ok

Zig

I have the perfect co write I will email it to you

Lou

lou

14 years 8 months ago

JC

thank you. the whole site feels strange, but exciting, because there seem to be a chance to make Neo even better.

Lou xx

lou

14 years 8 months ago

shirl

thanks for he kind comments

lou

14 years 8 months ago

This is good.

At my church we recently protested the 9th anniversary of the Afghan war.
The sentiments expressed there have been encapsulated exactly and succinctly in your poem. well done.

Respectfully,

Jim

lou

14 years 8 months ago

Hi

Thank you very much

Lou

judyanne

14 years 8 months ago

lou and ziggy

great write, very powerful
you two work well together.
love judy
xxxx

lou

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Judy

Its great to hear from you.

thank you

love lou

Hooded Stranger

14 years 8 months ago

Lou & Zigs

I have to say the title grabbed the highlight for me...so very perfect.

The write itself is well crafted and carries a strong view-point.

I think I can work out who wrote what, but I am very familiar with both your styles, so I had an advantage.

Great co-write my friends,

ziggy

14 years 8 months ago

HI

CHEERS hood i'm sure you could pick out our lines
would you try and do that it would be interesting lol,,,,,,,zigs

lou

14 years 8 months ago

HS

I thank you and I'm sure Zigs does to. I'm curious to know which bits you feel I wrote

Lou

Eumolpus

7 years 11 months ago

Yes how utterly sad for the soldier

treated no more than an insect by the powers that be. I appreciate your poem but have to think it's not that nobody wins...one side wins, and for most of our history made life miserable for the conquered. This continues today. As to why we are conquering ourselves in the first place..
have we really evolved more than the chimpanzees, who make war on each other just like us. I would like to think I have, and you have, so we just have to get everyone to agree to just not do it.
The Beatles were right, as was Auden, "we must love one another or die". I think Jesus said something about that too, among a few others.

I love this stanza!

Breathtaking sunsets creep
unfolding on to troubled horizons,
gaining ground.
Whilst those that are left cry,
" hear me lord, bring them home to me”.

youkay

6 years 6 months ago

Love it

The theme down to the choice of words is amazing