it is convenient

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem explores themes of aging, faith, and self-perception, using a conversational and confessional tone. The structure is free verse, with short lines and a straightforward diction that creates a sense of intimacy. The repetition of “it is convenient” at the beginning and near the end provides a subtle frame, suggesting a meditation on routine and adaptation to changing circumstances.

The poem’s perspective shifts between relationships with the father, God, and the self. The lines “I was / Made in God’s image / God tells me / I am a handsome men / In his eyes” introduce a blend of religious reflection and personal insecurity, though the phrase “handsome men” is grammatically inconsistent with the singular speaker. The poem’s voice is characterized by a plainspoken vulnerability, particularly in the admissions of aging and illness: “I am already an old man / My hair is falling out of my head / I am now a bald man / I am also have my sickness.” These lines are direct, but the phrasing (“I am also have my sickness”) is awkward and could benefit from revision for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

There is a juxtaposition between the speaker’s declining health and the continued beauty of the world, as seen in the final lines: “I hear the birds singing their / Lovely tune for me.” This moment offers a gentle contrast to the earlier focus on loss, suggesting solace or continuity in nature.

The poem’s use of enjambment and abrupt line breaks creates a fragmented rhythm that mirrors the speaker’s sense of disjunction between past and present. However, some line breaks feel arbitrary and may detract from the poem’s flow. Consider revising lineation to enhance emphasis and coherence.

The poem would benefit from attention to grammatical consistency (“men” vs. “man,” “I am also have my sickness”) and more precise language. The emotional core is clear, but tightening the language and refining the structure could strengthen the impact. The poem’s understated irony—particularly in the lines about God’s opinion and the speaker’s reluctance to argue—adds complexity, but could be developed further for greater effect.

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to the storyline. I was confused at the progress of the story. I can understand the use of the title of 

"It is convenient" If I were to look it up in the dictionary, or online, I might use it that way too. I think you need to be more aware of contemporary language. It's not that it is wrong, it just isn't used in the 'tense' that you used it in. I'm not sure that I can help other than to say, keep your story progressing, until you get a better handle on [asides]. Sorry if this doesn't help much. ~ Geezer.