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Is It Love or Is It Lust
When I hear your voice
I feel warm inside, like
Butterflies gliding in the wind
On a hot summer day
When I see your smile
My flesh tingles with passion, like
Goose bumps on my skin
On a cool breezy day
When I imagine your touch
I feel a hot stream building, like
Hot springs on Niagara Falls
In the depths of my stomach
Is it love or is it lust
Love is, lust does, can’t have one without the other
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Taking a break from school works. Test and projects due Monday.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
Maybe lol
I tend to shy away from contact of such in writing poetry. But may do a little for this one as a small addition to it.
Blow a fuse, may wanna leave out the contact. lol
scribbler
14 years 3 months ago
hello
one of the best of your I've read.................scribbler
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
Thanks Scribbler
Glad you think its that good.
raj
14 years 3 months ago
Hello Barbara
i liked the theme of this write which enquires if the feelings and emotions expressed in each stanza relate to love or lust...i believe love is like a gentle soothing refreshing breeze whereas lust is like a whirlwind...
the two can also be compared to the gentle waves lapping that the shores for the former and a tdle wave bursting at the shores...
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
Thanks Raj
Glad you like the theme. I have been dreaming up new themes to write about. takes real imagination.
"i believe love is like a gentle soothing refreshing breeze whereas lust is like a whirlwind...
the two can also be compared to the gentle waves lapping that the shores for the former and a tdle wave bursting at the shores..."
I like your deffinition of the love and lust. Never thought of it that way. Wow I really can see picture while stand on the shore.
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
I Read my poem again
I read my poem with your thoughts in mind and I like it. Your meaning changes the meaning of my ending. I like it also
Love holds back Lust does it all without shame.
Love is gentle Lust is wild. I see you can have one without the other.
Put the two together what do you get. I must think about that one again.
raj
14 years 3 months ago
Dear Barbara
in the context of what you have said as one being the pre cursor of the other..one can compare love with a spring with its gentle waters flowing in a stream and on the way it gathers speed as it courses through and gets wild in a free fall when it turns into rapids which is like an orgasmic burst....
magics02
14 years 3 months ago
Oh you tickle me fancy
I like the train of thought you have going on here and all the emotions and feelings writing to page. I like this one Barbara. You tell it like you feel it and see it and I like that alot to about you dear writer.
Blessings
Mona
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
thanks Mona
Not easy to write down. glad it tickled you fancy. lol
mand
14 years 3 months ago
Hi Barbara!
I always like your poems and this one is no exception.
You have made excellent use of similies - it helped to evok the feeling that you wanted to convey.
Thanks for sharing
Love Mand xxxxx
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
thanks Mand
A smile is precious and warms my heart. especially those on the faces of beautiful little babies
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
Glad you found it
Thus is true of love and lust thanks for sharing your naughty find. lol
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
thanks Jayne
I'm glad you stop by and read.
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
Hi
I am Chez and new here, I stopped by to read and meet. This is quite good and I agree with the statement ending here. Neither one exists without the other, it just becomes more comfortable the further the years go :)
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
HI
Welcome to Neopoet. I'm glad you stop by and read. thanks for kind comment
hobo
14 years 3 months ago
it is so nice
it is so nice if you lust the one you love, nice write my friend
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
Hobo
thanks for reading and commenting I really appreciate. Welcome to neopoet. Nice comment. some fall in love at first sight, some fall in love later. whether its lust at first sight or lust after many years its all good. :)
introvert
14 years 3 months ago
I have never seen it that way
I have never seen it that way,but then after reading this I guess I have changed my mind...nice work
Barbara Writes
14 years 3 months ago
Introvert
we all see love and lust in different ways. I reckon this is how I see it. thanks for sharing your thoughts