Neopoem Of The Week June 26 to July 2nd 2022

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It Never Ends for Freedom

Freedom lusts for me,
with a gentle chill.
Draws me
up,up,up,
catching the Lunar heavenly thrill.
...
Freedom betrays me,
with a fierce gloom.
Chains me
down,down,down,
into the Earth's hellish tomb.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Wanted to have fun with layout

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: [This option has been removed]

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: NSW, AUS

Favorite Poets: - Homer, - Hesiod, - Orpheus, - Sappho, - John Keats, - Robert Frost

Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years ago

Beauty in simplicity

Welcome. Great work. I like the rhythm, it’s a nice little read. The meaning I’m pulling out of it is definitely something that I’m drawn to. I like the duality of all things and I like how it’s really out perception of things or events that either releases us or chains us down. Right now this has a very deep symbolic connection to some social issues we are facing in America. I can’t really suggest any changes. It’s formatted in a way that makes sense. Punctuation is good, it looks good. Nice work and I look forward to reading more.

Tim

Stephanie Contarino

3 years ago

Reply - Tim

Hello
Thanks for your comment
Its nice to see that you were able to connect to the poem.
:)

Geezer

3 years ago

I'm not sure...

that this qualifies as free-verse, but no matter. I can't see anything I would change. Good job with the layout. Geezer.
.

Stephanie Contarino

3 years ago

Hello

Hello
Thanks for your comment
I do like the layout.
Something new I would like to try.

Candlewitch

3 years ago

hello Stephanie,

welcome to Neopoet, it is very nice to meet you! I very much like your poem, I can relate it to many things including my life, lol. I like your title, the rhythm and flow are continuous and I like the theme. I really like these lines:

Draws me
up,up,up,
catching the Lunar heavenly thrill.

I look forward to reading more of your poetic work!

*warm smiles, Cat