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It's All Good
a sunny day
low humidity
shadows are crisp
a zephyr leisurely strolls
through the valley
wispy clouds drift and sway
and here come the joggers
panting and sweating
ear buds implanted
goofy outfits
and a dead ahead gaze
cool shoes though
they pass quickly
birds are chirping
butterflys are fluttering
squirrls are chattering
ah! a waft of lilac
mingling with apple blossoms
quite pleasant and engaging
and here come the bikers
stormin' and roarin'
leather on leather
no helmet outlaws
fuming plumes of smoke and pot
(I wouldn't mind a toke or two myself)
the rumble slowly dopples away
sitting on the porch
as evening settles in
my old dog heaves a sigh
we are not like those others
they are not like us
and, as Martha used to say
"it's all good"
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
raj
7 years 1 month ago
Hi Al
you have created short film here which has the images and moods of early summer...there are many favorite lines for me here one of them being "crisp shadows"...
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brittle light
7 years 1 month ago
Raj
I so appreciate your input
thanks for being supportive
gratefully,
raj
7 years 1 month ago
My pleasure Al...reading your
My pleasure Al...reading your poetry is value addition for me...
regards...
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IRiz
7 years 1 month ago
Hello! What a great poem.
Hello! What a great poem.
I feel the mood, it reflected perfectly. The skillful selection of a few precise details creates the whole world.
Even if I am one of those joggers, I feel the mood of your protagonist and relate to him, to his dog and repeat after Martha "it's all good"
brittle light
7 years 1 month ago
Hello IRiz
such a gracious and gratifying assessment
thank you
...and I bet you have some pretty cool running shoes !
with much gratitude,
IRiz
7 years 1 month ago
Hi Al,
Hi Al,
It is my pleasure.
Here is something for you to chuckle
https://plus.google.com/+IreneRiz_phd/posts/gsBkSpX85SW
brittle light
7 years 1 month ago
IRiz
I knew it !
cool shoes
I liked the poem too.
(I haven't seen any timberdoodles lately either)
IRiz
7 years 1 month ago
Ha! Thank you. I am looking
Ha! Thank you. I am looking forward to reading more of your poems.
OriginalRhyku
7 years 1 month ago
Al,
I was looking to critique your poem, but I find it's all good.
One small note: the additional e in Dan Quail's potatoe must have been taken from your squirrls.
brittle light
7 years 1 month ago
thank you
thank you
and I do recognize the witty Dan Quail (Quayle) reference
I gave him that "e" and now I need it back, but seems he has disappeared from
the public eye and most memories.
I appreciate your thoughts