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May 21, 2022
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It's hard to breathe
It's hard to breathe
When she
Does that thing
With her tongue and her thigh
At the same time.
I
Feel like gravity
Got away from me
I
Die
It’s hard to breathe when I
reply
With a sigh
And say “higher, harder”
And she does.
And I...
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
3 years 1 month ago
hello!
this very suggestive piece is new and fresh and exciting! (without being obscene) I like it very much. I usually pick out my favorite lines of a poem, but I would not break this poem up as I loved the whole thing! very imaginative! I would gladly read more of your poetry...I will look for them in the "stream"
*hugs, Cat