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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Apr 20, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

It's Paradise In the Country

It's a beautiful day in the neighborhood.
Brick homes, timed sprinklers.
Plush green foliage, free flowing ponds.
Frogs singing nonstop.
It's a peaceful time in this country neighborhood.

If only the world was like this everywhere, everyday.
Quietness, birds chirping in the treetops.
It's music to my ears, heart and soul.
Paradise was put in us from the beginning of creation.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Comments

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

9 years 2 months ago

Hello Barbara

I like this very much, it concurs so much with my own way of thinking. One tiny nit, may just be the way I read it but I would swap the first two words of the second stanza.

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

9 years 2 months ago

Keith

Thanks for reading and the suggestion. I'm not sure homes brick works for me. I think maybe bricked homes.

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

9 years 2 months ago

Oh

Yeah like a light bulb that went off in my head it does read better

Rula

Rula

9 years 2 months ago

hello Barbara

The last line says it all!!
Thank you for sharing.

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

9 years 2 months ago

Rula

Thanks for the read critique. Glad you like it. The last line made it special for me too