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Nov 26, 2024
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Jacarandas
The jacarandas are blooming again
Now every walk outside
Is like a caress to my very soul
And every day more beautiful than the last
I'm reminded of the last time they bloomed
When I barely even noticed them
With my heart in anguish
Crying for a lost love
Time doesn't heal all wounds like they say
But it does make the weight more bearable
Now the jacarandas are blooming again
And this time, I'm here for it
It's not that it's all easy now
Some nights I can't even fall asleep
But the jacarandas are blooming again
And just for this little moment
I'm letting this be enough
It's not an easy ride, this life
Takes too much from each of us
But there's beauty in simple things
And sometimes, this is all we need
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
7 months ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem "Jacarandas" beautifully captures the cyclical nature of life and the healing power of nature's beauty. The imagery of the blooming jacarandas as a source of solace and comfort is vivid and evocative. The contrast between past and present experiences with the jacarandas adds depth to the poem, showing personal growth and resilience over time.
One suggestion for further enhancing the poem could be to explore more sensory details to fully immerse the reader in the experience. Consider incorporating sounds, smells, or textures associated with the blooming jacarandas to create a richer sensory experience.
Additionally, you may want to consider varying the rhythm or structure of the poem to add a dynamic element. Experimenting with line breaks or stanza lengths could help create a more engaging flow and emphasize key moments in the narrative.
Overall, "Jacarandas" is a poignant reflection on finding beauty and solace in the midst of life's challenges. By delving deeper into sensory details and experimenting with
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Rula
7 months ago
Hello Trail
I find your words full of hope and wisdom
I especially like these lines:
Time doesn't heal all wounds like they say
But it does make the weight more bearable
Now the jacarandas are blooming again
And this time, I'm here for it
I like the repetitive line as well.
Much appreciation and much enjoyment
Thank you for sharing!
Trail
7 months ago
Hey Rula
I'm really glad you enjoyed reading my poem. I've been trying to put a more positive spin on my poetry these days coz I realized my previous works were too full of melancholy. Thanks for the lovely review
Lavender
7 months ago
Jacarandas
Hello, Trail,
I am not familiar with this beautiful tree so I went google-ing. How glorious! I can feel the sense of comfort being among them brings, and the appreciation for them as heartache softens. There is so much to look at and study here in your poem. If I were painting this, as if on canvas, I might add a splash of color here and there, hues of purple. Let the reader experience the stunning visual, too. Especially since you are now "here for it."
Beautiful!
L
Trail
7 months ago
Hey L
You always know exactly what to say to make my day. Now that you mention it, a bit of sensory detail would have made the feeling more real, but I guess I got caught up in "the moment". Thank you for your beautiful words and amazing advice. I always appreciate it. Much love