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c lynn brooks
Jul 19, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Idle Time Poetry

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Jealousy What ?(Idle Time Workshop 2)

Your sister is beautiful
smart
talented
your brother is educated in his field
handsome
and you my dear child
why you will make someone a good housewife one day
Say what now! a good what ?

years passed by she became a published author ,
why that is a nice hobby dear
ran her own business
why that is nice
and where is my beautiful sister
retired and happy she had her success and now lives quietly
my brother
well he was a mechanical draftsman but has since passed on
so I guess he is at peace
and the girl
well the rest is history folks
jealousy, envy anger
have no place in her life
any longer

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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Lavender

Lavender

4 years 11 months ago

Jealousy What?

Hi, Chrys,
I sense the comparison through the years, and the strength and self-esteem coming to terms with all of it. Amen!
Thank you!
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c lynn brooks

4 years 11 months ago

lavender

yes coming to terms is correct and thank you for reading

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

I had to read...

a couple of times to make sense of the part where she ran her own business, because it was out of sequence, but once I got where the "beautiful one" was, then I got it. Yup, coming to terms with expectations. Jealousy is a hard topic. Good job. ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks

4 years 11 months ago

Geezer

thank you I will re read and see were you may have gotten stuck

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c lynn brooks

4 years 11 months ago

teddy

thank you it was written in retrospect through the eyes of the one that was told they would be the housewife and no not the mother but the father
and this is a true story but yes there was jealousy ,hurt and anger as good was never good enough no matter what they did

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raj

4 years 11 months ago

Hi Chrys

I too had to read this a couple of time to sort out the genders till i figured it out....good work in sync with the prompt for the workshop..

be well..

C

c lynn brooks

4 years 11 months ago

Raj

thanks for the read isn't it strange how it turns out that the men that read this found it difficult to sort out not getting on any gender just an unusual observation