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IKnowNoBox
Sep 05, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

"A Journey..."*

from the...

Water
Of
My
Birth

to the...

Ground where my
Remains lie an
An extinguished
Vessel decomposing under
Earth

About This Poem

Last Few Words: *Acrostic Now read the by verses along with the capital letters going down

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Comments

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raj

13 years 10 months ago

Hi David

great imagination in coming up with an acrostic on womb to grave...

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 9 months ago

David

an excellent write that conforms to the acrostic art, I hope that you have looked up the A-Z of poetry as there are many varieties of acrostics that are fun to do,
Yours Ian.T

S

scribbler

10 years 12 months ago

hi

The rules for acrostic are a bit stretched but the spirit remains............stan

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IKnowNoBox

10 years 12 months ago

I have others

that I will be posted in time. Thanks for reviewing.

In ink
David

jane210660

jane210660

9 years 1 month ago

Clever

I thought this was rather clever BEFORE I realised it was an acrostic - yeas a bit slow, but I hadn't had my morning coffee :-). I was really impressed when I woke up and saw the full thing. Jx

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IKnowNoBox

9 years 1 month ago

Thank you.

It took me some time to polish it with the use of Birth in place of Beginning.