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JULY 27

A breeze blows by here on the porch
yet sweat still gathers on my brow
'cause its so hot even weeds scorch,
It could be hotter.... I don't know how.

A cloud is building in the west,
I hope it decides to come this way
a bit of rain would be well blessed
on this hot dry summer day.

A crow arches on the power pole
then fluffs his feathers trying to cool.
He can't offset being black as coal.
So I squawk at him like an old fool.

Across the field a whirlwind rages
sending leaves and such into the air
which twirl like torn up poems' pages.
Then it dissipates without a care.

That building cloud went another way
taking other clouds along with it.
Man it sure is hot today.
Did I already mention it?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

Yes...

It surely is hot today! I felt like I could be watching the same scene from my front porch; looking out over the valley.
Only thing I see to change, is the addition of the word [air] the last word of the second line in the fourth stanza.
~ Geez.
.

S

scribbler

2 years 11 months ago

Hi Gee

I thought it never got really hot up your way lol. Thanks for spotting my omission (hasty posting). stay cool

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

Oh Hell yeah...

it gets hot here. We have had high eighties and nineties for the last two weeks! 102 they claim with the heat-index; whatever the hell that is. It is supposed to be in the high-mid eighties for the next week. Not much rain; they keep promising thunderstorms, but we've only gotten a couple of little rumbles and hardly any lightning. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

hello Scribbler,

I'm sorry you are so hot and miserable I am in my cool basement.I hope your hot spell breaks with some rain.

*hugs, Cat

S

scribbler

2 years 11 months ago

Well

We trade off mild winters for hot summers lol. thanks for dropping by

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 11 months ago

Yeah you said it

I’m framing a 96 foot long single family home. The entire two acre lot is cleared. The dust rise like the wastelands of a Mad Max film. There is no such thing as shade. This is definitely hitting the mark with me.

Good one,
Tim