Just another patient!

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively conveys a sense of frustration and helplessness, which is a strong emotional appeal to the reader. The repetition of the phrase "do what you please" emphasizes the speaker's perceived lack of control, reinforcing the theme of the poem.

However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery. For instance, instead of stating "your meds and your routines," the poem could describe these elements in more detail to create a more vivid picture in the reader's mind. Similarly, the line "I'm just an experiment" could be expanded upon to provide a clearer image of what the speaker is experiencing.

The poem also uses a consistent rhyme scheme, which helps to create a rhythm and flow. However, the rhythm is disrupted in the last line, "it's out of your league." This line has more syllables than the previous lines, which could disrupt the reader's flow. Consider revising this line to maintain the rhythm of the poem.

The poem's use of language is straightforward and direct, which helps to convey the speaker's emotions. However, the poem could benefit from more varied language and more complex sentence structures to add depth and complexity to the poem.

Finally, the poem could benefit from a more developed conclusion. The final lines "for you'll never change me / it's out of your league" suggest a defiance and resilience on the part of the speaker, but this idea could be expanded upon to provide a more satisfying conclusion to the poem.

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I know this feeling, the feelings and treatment you describe in your poem. You bring up memories of long ago. I hope this is only poetic license and not reality. If it i real, please stay strong. my thoughts are with you. these may be my favorite lines:

Taking your scrutiny
till I just want to scream.
If I don't hold my tongue
you'll crucify me.

been there...
*hugs, Cat