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Oct 07, 2024
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JUST A CRUEL JOKE
JUST A CRUEL JOKE
So finally, I had decided to risk it
As nothing would change my mind
But a prize I won was just a biscuit
If a trick was played, it was unkind
I was unsure if I’d bother to collect
In the end I went, feeling resigned
I bought many tickets, in retrospect
Between bet and return, a disparity
And raffle rules apply, I do suspect
So there was I, searching for clarity
Stifling a laugh, a voice then spoke
Reminding me it was all for charity
But from that dream, I finally woke
Not any nightmare, just a cruel joke
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Geezer
9 months 2 weeks ago
I get...
the feeling that this poem is about the prize that was intimated, rather than what was received. The reminding voice is what we tell ourselves, when we are faced with the reality of disappointment. A very real emotion. I am very impressed with the rhyme scheme and the thought. Nice job. ~ Geez.
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Triskelion
9 months 1 week ago
Hi Twizzle
I am someway impressed how your word choices created nearly even lines and still managed to maintain the theme throughout. The rhyme scheme is also pretty cool
Thomas