Lavender

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Just a Few Minutes Ago

It is sweet
the way the trees
watch the cloud
as it ambles by.
They close their eyes
and bow their heads
as if in reflection,
remembering the way
the sun felt on their faces,
recalling how bright
the world was
just a few minutes
ago.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Lavender

5 years 2 months ago

Hello, Teddy

Typo corrected, thank you so much! Also, thanks for your comments and reading.
Lavender

Lavender

5 years 2 months ago

Hello, Jerry

Thank you for reading! I appreciate your thoughts!
Lavender

c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

lavendar

may I suggest you use the same number throughout your poem Your first line is plural (trees) then you have a single cloud in the 3rd line
then your 4th line would read as they

but I'm thinking you just made a typo and added s to trees change it to one tree and the rest of the poem follows
plus it is so much easier to change one letter lol

I like this piece good concept

Lavender

5 years 2 months ago

Hello, Chrys

Thank you for reading and your suggestions! I actually sat one morning in the woods and watched a single cloud roll by - it was so silent and still as if each tree bowed. I'll certainly consider your suggestion, but I'd like to keep the feel of that solitary shadow.
Thank you for reading!
L

c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

lavendar

yes of course then just omit the s from treedsand there you have everything is singular
again i love the concept of this poem

Rula

5 years 2 months ago

What a reflection!

dear lavender. I especially like the trees bowing to the clouds.
One small suggestion if I may. I thought you don't need the word slowly as amble already means to go at a slow, easy pace. Just an opinion, you know better what suits your poem
Already enjoyed ,;-)

Lavender

5 years 2 months ago

Hello, Rula

Wonderful suggestion, and I have removed "slowly."
Thank you for reading!
L

Gracy

5 years 2 months ago

Lovely, yet sad reflection,

Lovely, yet sad reflection, Lavender. I agree that you should put all in plural or single. Better plural, IMO. And remove "slowly".
Enjoyed, bring on more.

Lavender

5 years 2 months ago

Hello, Gracy

I wrote this about a year ago, and at that time it felt reflective, but not sad. The poem felt especially sad when I posted it earlier today - haven't a clue why.
Thank you so much!
L

Geezer

5 years 2 months ago

Like Jerry...

this put me in a mood to wonder about if the trees really think of how they fit in with the rest of the world. This is a sign that you have the power to make people think. What more can one ask for? Geezer.
.

Lavender

5 years 2 months ago

Hi, Geezer

I really like reading and writing poetry using personification, especially with nature. The more I study it, the more I realize our interactions seem to have positive / negative effects. Like Jerry, I think it would be amazing to hear the history of mankind from that 2000 year old tree. I appreciate your thoughts!
Thank you!
L