Just Flashed My Mind

Now I pass by other valleys
where water trickles
silently and slowly

I see nothing but greenery
hence no more do I feel lonely

Pass your time with an open mind
care not who is watching you
or here reading you

Comments now
fly over my bloated mind
as I am aged
and that there lies within my cage
no crime

later I post a poem
it may may not rhyme
but are you poet divine
wanting me to lay supine
Comment at your will Sire
I shall still admire

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

Comments

Sparrow 42

5 years 8 months ago

Loved

When I saw the title I became worried but it turns out that you wrote a very gentle piece. Just read it out and see that there are a couple of places that need attention,
Yours as always Ian ..

Geezer

5 years 8 months ago

Sometimes...

a person can worry about what others think a bit too much. ~ Gee.
.

lovedly

5 years 8 months ago

a person can 'worry' about what others think a bit too much -Gee

Sorry Gee
I cater fr the intelligent ones
like me
Do you now agree

folks are born
just to say
you are born
to not dismay

c lynn brooks

5 years 8 months ago

lovedly

enjoyed readng ths I still try to respond to most poems note I said try lol

lovedly

5 years 8 months ago

your trying

is enough for me
I know you now do read me
hit me when I deserve it

praise me silently
I will know it
Thanks
clb

Rottiestyl

5 years 8 months ago

Lovedly

I liked this. I read to different subjects in here. Most would say that is confusing, but like art abstracts are for the individual to absorb their way, in their eye.

Simon

5 years 8 months ago

Yap

Most of the times if you follow other people's comments you will get piesed up but there always a room for comments to flow in that's why no writter is more perfact than all.