mand

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This poem is part of the workshop:

"Sonnets"...Let's Know More

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Just Practising! - with iambic pentameter

The robin sings it's song atop the tree.
A tuneful sound, resounding melody.

The ROB /in SINGS /it's SONG / a TOP / the TREE
a TUNE / ful SOUND, / re SOUND / ing MEL / o DY

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I haven't got the time, so says the clock,
my gears are failing, hence I've lost my tock.
My springs have gone all rusty with decay,
and so I can't recall the time of day.

I HAVE / nt GOT / the TIME, / so SAYS / the CLOCK
My GEARS / are FAIL / ing HENCE / i've LOST / my TOCK.
my SPRINGS / have GONE / all RUST / y WITH / de CAY
and SO / I CANT / re CALL / the TIME / of DAY.

( I have a feeling "de CAY" should be "DE cay" )

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: GBR

Comments

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

A great practice

Dear Mand.
Yes, you did it.
10/10 .... Bravo!
Now back to the sonnet
Twelve more lines and you are there.

mand

10 years 5 months ago

Rula

Awesome!

judyanne

10 years 5 months ago

I knew you could do it Mand

You have a feel for rhythm
Just curious - have you studied music?

Great couplet...
Now try a quatrain in iambic pentameter
love judy
xxx

mand

10 years 5 months ago

Hi Judy

Self taught - not to a professional degree but enough to get me by - it helps with the meter?

I just hope this one isn't a one off. :) Still it's given me a boast. I have attempted a sonnet ( just one ) haven't put it up because it's just a sonnet not an Italian sonnet.

Anyway I'm glad I've managed to get this part right.so far :)

Thanks for coming by to make a comment.

Love to you

Mand xxx

raj

10 years 5 months ago

Mand

i sneaked in here to see if i could gather some tips and find that you scored a perfect10 in the first attempt...and me is struggling...lol...

keep it up...

much love..

mand

10 years 5 months ago

Raj

You are doing really well! it takes time - but your getting there!

besides this might well be beginners luck! lol

Love to you

Mand xxxx

judyanne

10 years 5 months ago

lol mand

Well done
You have iambic pentameter down pat
Time to start work on your sonnet
Xxx

mand

10 years 5 months ago

Oww

it's at this point that I'm starting to get smug! somebodies goin to have to slap me! Lol :)

xxxx

Sparrow

10 years 5 months ago

Urgggggg!

Isyam bic penty whats it, I get what it is, and have great praise for those that write in that form but to me it is a long process and takes far too long to say what I want to say.
Well done Mand a great write at it. Urgggggg.
Yours Ian xx