Simon

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JUSTICE

Crime has many eyes
Wings but can't fly
Long as snake
bites itself often
Has extended family
And through the generations--distant relatives

Justice sees no sound
Hears no insight
The thorn amidst the crop
Because what's "a lion without tooth
Tree without root
Lie without truth?"---justice.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: The crimes been committed in societies now is too much and it seems some governments are not addressing it properly,which means there is so much conspiracy but the day of justice shall arrive sooner or later.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , abuja

Favorite Poets: Any good poet of my likening

Comments

chevyvent

6 years 1 month ago

Lover rermark you got going on here

very good writing you have her waiting for,
"Justice sees no sound
Hears no insight
The thorn amidst the crop",
potsherd

Simon

6 years 1 month ago

Hi chevyvent

Thanks for your comment I'm so excited been with a neopoet family.
Thanks once more.

Geezer

6 years 1 month ago

I see...

your hunger for humanity to be free from the abuse of power. I don't think that there is one answer to the lifting and saving of people under the rule of tyrants. I liked the simile of crime to a snake and the way that crime has generations and extended family. Did you mean [wings] instead of winds?
I really think I got the thought behind the theme. ~ Geezer.
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Simon

6 years 1 month ago

Well

Actually it's suppose to be (wings) but it is mistake of a finger touch thanks for your observation.

gregwa8

6 years 1 month ago

a nice two part poem. crime

a nice two part poem. crime/justice. a long snake that bites itself is a clever image. I especially like the final rhymes, "what's a lion without tooth, tree without root, lie without truth?"

Simon

6 years 1 month ago

Thanks

Thanks for liking this poem I pray that justice is done at the end.

Cloudthings

6 years ago

Hi Simon

I got some good emotive reaction from those first few lines, you came at the concept in a different way than I would have , & that is often a great thing... Loved the imagery of. "long as a snake, bites itself often" & also the way the following line made me explore my own understanding/perspective of crime.

Good job

Simon

6 years ago

Thanks cloudthings

It's my pleasure here having your comment and I'm so excited knowing that you love it.