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Feb 27, 2025
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Kindness of Strangers
A random act of Kindness
came my way last night
I went into a Lounge Cafe,
After an entire day of shite.
My stress levels were high
Hard to focus or think
All of my anxieties,
Becalmed by a strong drink.
The girl at the bar took my order
And asked me "are you alright" ?
I had to tell her the truth,
I was worried and uptight.
She looked at me with concern,
Smiled and turned to say:
This one is on the house
You don't have to pay.
I thanked her in amazement
I was so impressed
The kindness of a stranger
Made me feel quite blessed.
Thank you African maiden
For showing me you care
Though we may not meet again,
I'm glad that you were there.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
4 months ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Kindness of Strangers" effectively captures a moment of unexpected kindness and gratitude towards a stranger. The use of simple language and a clear narrative structure helps convey the emotions and the impact of the encounter. However, there are a few areas that could be improved for clarity and impact.
Consider refining the rhyme scheme and meter throughout the poem to enhance its flow and consistency. Additionally, try to vary the structure of the stanzas to create more visual interest and rhythm.
Furthermore, explore adding more sensory details or vivid imagery to paint a more vivid picture of the scene and the emotions involved. This can help the reader connect more deeply with the experience being shared.
Overall, the poem has a heartfelt message and potential for deeper emotional resonance with some revisions to structure and imagery.
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Ruby Lord
4 months ago
I did enjoy your poem and
I did enjoy your poem and came back to read it more than once. It helped lift me out of my current negative thinking. I'm even considering going to the pub right now. But I know Nicky behind the bar won't give me a free drink, she might not even smile, unless I paid her and gave her a big tip.
Your rhyme scheme is good, the subject is positive and the outcome was marvellous. I wouldn't change a thing. Ruby xx
Mary Derringer
3 months 3 weeks ago
I really enjoyed the venture of your poem
The kindness you admired in your poem was a true act of friendship.I enjoyed reading your poem.
Sen99
3 months 3 weeks ago
Thank you Mary
for reading and your comments, glad it spoke to you