A Kiss In A Dream

Her lips were red and occupied with giggles,
so I planted a wet one on her cheeks.
She said I was a coward,
so I kissed her on her lips to prove
I was a man.

I kissed her in a dream,
and sent her packing all the way back home,
just before sunrise.

She thought I lied,
she said I made it up.

but I did, I said,
for all my dreams are lies, you see?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: a true story.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ghana, GHA

Favorite Poets: William Shakespeare, Lord Byron, John Keats, Percy Shelley, Oscar Wilde, Alfred Lord Tennyson, Henry Longfellow, William Yates, Ezra Pound, Sylvia Plath

Comments

Ian.T

11 years 8 months ago

W St G

Well don't know whether you are coming or going on this one.
Very interesting to throughout,
you may awake to reality one grand morning and think it but a dream,
Yours Ian.T

William Saint George

11 years 8 months ago

I'm glad

you got the point of this poem. It is about dreams. Thanks for enjoying it. :)

Seren

11 years 8 months ago

Hello

What can I say this one had a twist I really liked it, I cant see that I can offer anything in the way of crit, you've got it all here, well done

regards Jayne-Chloe

William Saint George

11 years 8 months ago

Thanks for dropping by again!

Thanks for dropping by again!! :)

loved

11 years 8 months ago

u kiss a poem... once in a way

u kiss a poem... once in a way
that too in a dream
and doubt your own manliness

You kiss a poem... once in a way
I kiss all over
anyone

but kisses me
just no one

so daily I compose
A KISS POEM!

It satisfies my inner urge
as desire
from inside does surge...
Where are they
who kissed me one day,
now they my love and kisses betray

have they forgotten the lips given
and those ones secretly taken
but then I was young
now old
sans teeth ...white ones
now unfold as dentures
so how would kiss me
anyone...