Kiss Me, Hardy

Horatio lay on the deck,
His body was a total wreck;
A musket shot had laid him low;
He was good and ready, set to go.
But Hardy was just passing by
And he caught the Admiral's eye
"Oy Hardy! Howza bout a snog?"
Shouted that randy old sea dog.
And when Hardy stooped to check
At Nelson lying on the deck,
The admiral groped Hardy's cute left bun
And then slipped him his lordly tongue.
Thus was Trafalgar won that day
With a kiss O so very gay.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A bit of gay history not many know about.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

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About the Author

Region, Country: London, Culture Capital of the World

Favorite Poets: Siegfried Sassoon, Wilfred Owen, Rupert Brooke, Chaucer, Shakespeare to name but a few. And VERY IMPORTANTLY: Erich Fried, a leftwing Austrian of Jewish ancestry who fled the Nazis and became a British citizen in 1949., And, other writers (non-poets mainly): Raymond Chandler, Irvine Welsh, Anthony Burgess, Graham Greene, Charles Bukowski, John le Carré, Anthony Horowitz, Mick Herron, Margaret Attwood, Edna O'Brian, Maeve Binchy., Writers who I find vastly over-rated: TS Eliot, Virgina Woolf, Sylvia Plath, Phil Larkin, E.A. Poe, A. Ginsburg, Longfellow, Gerald Manley Hopkins (actually I LOATHE Hopkins more than damson-dappled words can say).

Comments

Geezer

5 years 9 months ago

An entertaining bit...

of Gay history, that I didn't know! I thought your little ditty was quite amusing and wish that it had been a bit more smooth.
The fourth line was not very well conceived and I wish that you had paid more attention to the rhythm. ~ Geezer.
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