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This poem is part of the contest:

The Winter Season

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A Kiss of Winter (Winter season Contest)

As the first snowflake fell upon the land,
it brings about both joy and sadness.

The families huddling together in warm houses,
sheltered from the dreaded cold and loneliness,
will be placing parcels of gifts around their christmas trees
or sharing wonderful stories of delights in company.

To them it is the season to be celebrated together
as they sing the carols and play games with each other.
A chance to display their love to the young and old
and to remember the treasure that is greater than gold.

Alas, there are still the homeless, chilled to the bones,
faces empty of joy, shackled by past memories
of beautiful moments in life that have come and gone.
They gather in crowded shelters, fleeing from winter's kiss.

In homes for the aged, the forgotten elders
waiting for their loved ones to visit their abode
or lost in grief, their families all departed
as they long for the end of their lives' road.

Such is the truth of the season
when winter embraces the land.
Joy and sadness of the humans,
entwined as one, defining them

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

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Comments

S

scribbler

9 years 6 months ago

Hi Alid

Yes, there Is a sad side to the season. You might want to check for a few typos but thanks for entering......stan

alidzain

alidzain

9 years 6 months ago

Stan

I tried proofreading but still can't find the typos! A little help, please...!

Alid

S

scribbler

9 years 6 months ago

Ok

Line 18 change longed to long
Line 20 change embrace to embraces
also forgot period at end of poem.
I hope you have a great new year.......stan

alidzain

alidzain

9 years 6 months ago

Stan

I've edited line 18 and line 20 as you have suggested but I don't get what you mean by "forget period at te end of poem".

Alid

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 6 months ago

Alid

A good write for the contest one small thing the line:-
As the first drop of snow fell upon the land,
I would prefer something like:-
As the first snowflake fell upon the land..
Snow is from tiny frozen particles to large wet flakes never drops, me splitting hairs maybe, Yours Ian..
Cannot find the typo's either, lol..