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Jul 06, 2012
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Kristen
wore the colors of illusion
wove through the eye of a hurricane
you rode
iridescent green and blues
tapestries gathered
all by you
and the frost grew
and grew
the lake breath blew
against the star eye
of the evening traffic light
beneath the window
were you put out your
candles
praying for the signs
eventuality would arrive
and right thing up
like a button
like a hymn sewn up
the lip of an angel lost
in the scorn of the storm
beneath the magnitude
of might hard cast
each blink in the
harsh fresh toss
one more to the
ghosts whom lost
a cry in the night
for the dreams that cost
and the wires sang
their tired lament
on barren streets
a burden meant
for rests light sheen
all that and more
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Esker
13 years ago
...like lights worry creeping neath the hallways door
//// winter of once there and was ...///
Esker
13 years ago
"like a hymn sewn shut"
"of might hard cast
and tossed"
that was how it was supposed to be
originally my mind skips
maybe without it It sounds okay
I dont know...
Ian.T
13 years ago
Steve
This is a beautiful piece, I think that sometimes you lose your reader in a flurry of poetry, the short explain at the bottom in your comments made the read a lot easier, it gives us a key to unlock the theme and then enjoy the read, Yours Ian.T
Esker
13 years ago
cheater notes
not that its impossible to fathom
but who wants to spend their time trying to Unencrypt something
Poetry the old rhym stuff is meant to enjoy
a ride of words upon the mind and pallette of speech
sometimes its like a music box that needs the key to
wind it up and set it in motion in the mind
Thank You
Ian.T
13 years ago
Steve
If only we could hear the music that your words play as you pen them.
We could sing the songs of feelings that is a forgotten skill.
If only I could talk to the Elders, they would tell me their colour.
They could show me the passing of things from one state to the next.
I glimpse the cloth as it shrinks into the light as they fade within.
I bet that in your minds eye you can see them and in your listening,
you can hear their words, they talk as you do, in quiet tones....
Yours Ian.T
Roscoe Lane
13 years ago
I like,
I like this poem very much, and could feel the anxiety in the thoughts as you wrote this. I have probably said this before if not i say it now, you have a very unique style of poetry that creates an illusion with words. But keeps the reader inside the reality of your thoughts. Please that you continue. Regards Roscoe..
BlueDemon77
13 years ago
Hi Steve!
I always saw many of your works of the ilk that one doesn't hold in a hemisphere of the brain as an unterstanding. Instead it's a vortex of complex images one falls through headlong. Does that make it less effective....hell no. Few can do it. When I've read one of your poems, this one included, I know that something special has touched me. Great work once again.
Ron
Blue Demon77