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A Lady Larvae.

A heavy crack, the fracturing of my shell;
where I – a small worm inside – warp pinkly
raw in the new, fatal freedom of
inflating into the full glut of persona:

misled by the echo; a lung-less struggle to
indulge completion dampens my wings,
stunted in static awe:

rare kites – mapped with veins – tear at the
apex, hind wing anchored to an abdomen
slit to the hilt, divides the legs & thorax for
a mutated, mortal delivery into a
resurrection damned to the local fabric of
earth.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Auckland, New Zealand., NZL

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Rainer Rilke, Charles Bukowski, John Keats, William Blake, Emily Dickinson, George Gordon Byron, Robert Frost, William Shakespeare, Allen Ginsberg, William Burroughs, W.B Yeats, Arthur Rimbaud...., Are just some off the top of my head...

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weirdelf

weirdelf

8 years 8 months ago

You're just getting better and better.

Tell me the name and address of whoever put you off writing poetry for so long and I will deliver a devastating Elven curse on them. Perhaps glue them to the ceiling, or turn them into an orc.

One question. The last line seems to contradict, unless I misread this (not an uncommon occurrence) resurrection freed from the local fabric of earth?

Tell me where I went wrong.

Sommer Lyn

Sommer Lyn

8 years 8 months ago

Thank you for your comments.

Thank you for your comments. I am delighted you guys enjoy this one so much.

And as for the last line - it is 'damned' because the metamorphosis was unsuccessful because the wings tore, which means the creature could not fly. She was "resurrected" into a new form that was damned to fall to earth and die slowly as opposed to flying free like the rest of the moths/butterflies. It's a little morbid, I know, but it captured my feeling of being malformed in metamorphosis fairly accurately.

Esker

Esker

8 years 8 months ago

technically vivid

if this was a painting it would be powerful
vivid...startling!
it is this too as a poem!
Blasted of the harrow of life
departures..arrivals
shifts...a downed angel
nothing like having to walk
keeps our feet in hell
mixing with the mortals

Malformed..I can relate
well enough!

Excellent poem!

ThAnk U