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May 20, 2014
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Laptop Bugginess
FB bugginess getting me down
Putting viruses on my laptop
Adware spyware making me crash
My websites won't respond
Took a pill fell past asleep
While refreshing updating my computer system
Restart restart before I'm out
Woke up my laptop still restarting
A little computer rap, if you will
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
11 years 1 month ago
I took the liberty of recording this
in an angry ocker accent.
I think, even though it is not your way, a few cuss words and slang would not go astray to convey the anger and frustration. Also needs rhyme or alliteration to make it more "rappy".
Tell us what you really felt!
https://soundcloud.com/jess-tapper/laptop-bugginess-by-barbara
Barbara Writes
11 years 1 month ago
Jess
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Barbara Writes
11 years 1 month ago
Jess
Lol. This was a rough draft. I have rhymed it but haven't post as I'm still working on it. Wanting to record it with some beats. Can't get that annoying son of mine to record me.
Gonna hear your version now.