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Aug 08, 2020
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last dance (by: eddy styx)
hush...
can you hear it?
take a deep breath
hold it, now listen...
if you can hear
past the thudding
of your own heart...
put the palm of your hand
lightly but firmly to your chest.
now, put your hand to mine,
feel the difference in intensity?
the slow steady beat
like the ticking
of a grand clock...
winding down.
now meet my eyes
as my blade slides
between your beautiful ribs...
my dead heart quickens,
at the intake of
your last vanishing breath
and I ease your spent body
languidly to the ground.
*eddy styx is my malevolent male alter ego who writes dark poetry
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Candlewitch
4 years 11 months ago
oh yes! please do...
having an alter ego is great for freeing the imagination! it helps a person to step out of themselves and write creatively. you find that you see things in a new light, or should I say a new darkness, LOL!
ever, eddy
always, Cat
Breakinglogic
4 years 11 months ago
cat,
cat,
I like the pacing of this. There is a certain attentive and measured quality to eddy's instructions. Can I call it romantic?
Candlewitch
4 years 11 months ago
hey Raffy,
thank you for telling me what you liked about my poem, I appreciate it greatly!
ever, eddy
always, Cat
raj
4 years 11 months ago
Hi Cat
as anticipated your alter ego is back and with a pretty dark poem which creates the effect (horrific)...
always a lesson to read your poems...
be well...hugs..
Candlewitch
4 years 11 months ago
dear raj,
it is always a great pleasure to have a visit from you! thank you.
ever, eddy
always, Cat